my floating umbrella

5 Responses to my floating umbrella

1. spaine says:

   January 27, 2016 at 12:46 pm

   I like the way you have chosen to use the words. It is an original story. Do you think you have used exclamation marks well? Could you improve the last but one sentence? Mr Paine
2. mills says:

   January 27, 2016 at 2:18 pm

   I like your story Billie. It is very original and I like that.
3. heggo says:

   January 27, 2016 at 2:22 pm

   I like this story Billie. Its very simple and I like that
4. tomko says:

   January 27, 2016 at 2:23 pm

   Great story really like it keep up the good work Billie. P.S was it Friday the 13te.
   By Owen
5. hantb says:

   January 27, 2016 at 2:25 pm

   I LOVE YOUR STORY BILLIE!!!!! It is amazing. I wish there was more so that I could read it all day. From Brooke

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