This is a great piece – some fantastic word choices and you really feel like you are on the descent with you. A good balance of sentence lengths and a good use of punctuation.
This reads as part of a great novel – perhaps you should write the whole novel including this amazing paragraph – I would buy it!
Boban, another great piece of writing. I hope you share it with your family as I am sure they will enjoy it as much as I did.
Mr Paine
This is a great piece – some fantastic word choices and you really feel like you are on the descent with you. A good balance of sentence lengths and a good use of punctuation.
This reads as part of a great novel – perhaps you should write the whole novel including this amazing paragraph – I would buy it!
A great read.
Mrs Haka
Great story!
I can feel myself as the person getting ready.
I can’t wait to see what’s next!
Great use of adjectives really gives us the feeling that we are with you in this scene, well done.
very good!
Great sentences, kept my interest!
This is soooo good. well done. I like the language and the idea. I agree with Mrs Haka. I would buy your book!!!
well done m8
well done