A sad ending, but a great piece. I liked the start – very unusal to ski down a tree trunk – you have a good imagination!
You have missed one capital letter – can you spot where? Otherwise well written. You could use some commas in places to improve it further if you have time in class to work on this, for example after “Innocently”.
Please put another piece on soon so I can enjoy reading it.
Amelia, excellent writing again. Well done for completing the challenge. Please make sure that you share it with your family.
Mr Paine
A sad ending, but a great piece. I liked the start – very unusal to ski down a tree trunk – you have a good imagination!
You have missed one capital letter – can you spot where? Otherwise well written. You could use some commas in places to improve it further if you have time in class to work on this, for example after “Innocently”.
Please put another piece on soon so I can enjoy reading it.
Mrs Haka