Megan well done for completing this weeks challenge with an interesting entry. I think you could have added a bit of punctuation. Do you agree? Share your great writing with you family and get them to comment to.
Mr Paine
Great ideas and the enchated bird seed is my favourite bit. I agree with Mr Paine though, this piece would be greatly improved with use of punctuation – where could you add punctuation to benefit the reader so your piece is easy to read and makes more sense?
Megan well done for completing this weeks challenge with an interesting entry. I think you could have added a bit of punctuation. Do you agree? Share your great writing with you family and get them to comment to.
Mr Paine
Great ideas and the enchated bird seed is my favourite bit. I agree with Mr Paine though, this piece would be greatly improved with use of punctuation – where could you add punctuation to benefit the reader so your piece is easy to read and makes more sense?
Continue to enjoy writing.
Mrs Haka