Big hole

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9 Responses to Big hole

  1. alexj says:

    Great story micheal, good use of ellipsis

  2. heanb says:

    Really good i like it

  3. tomko says:

    Good story but try to add a bit more powerful verbs

  4. stokb says:

    Michael this was a great blog i really enjoyed reading this the only thing I would say is to use some sentence openers it would really improve your work.

  5. faira says:

    You forgot to say ….a whistle blew and everyone disappeared…. but it was amazing

  6. bafly says:

    I love the story very intresting

  7. oneka says:

    I really liked your story.

  8. oneka says:

    I really like your stroy

  9. carly says:

    i really enjoyed your story maybe try to add in the prompt next time

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