Ella week 33

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4 Responses to Ella week 33

  1. Mrs Haka says:

    I like the simile about the train – a great opening!

    Well done.

  2. Miss Scott (Team100WC) Durham says:

    I would love to know what happened to the stray dog. I really enjoyed how you started a sentence with ‘Rushing’.
    Always reread your work to check you haven’t missed any full stops.

  3. Lynda (Team 100WC) from Hartlepool says:

    This is lovely writing. You have used some great phrases which enable the reader to feel the pull of the wind and the panic of being dragged back. I wanted to know what was going to happen next! Well done for taking part in the 100 Word Challenge this week.

  4. Achieng says:

    Missing some commas ,but apart from that it was a great piece of writing!

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