Hi Amelia
I like how you have taken the prompt and intertwined it with Alice in Wonderland. I thought it was a tricky prompt. What were you late for? Some vocabulary could have been improved, for example – “… doing a fantastic dance…” could be “…performing a fantastic dance…” But overall this is a well punctuated 100WC piece, keep up the great work! Ms T, New Zealand
Amelia, I love your imaginative story and connection to Alice in Wonderland! It sounds like her adventure down the rabbit hole could have a lot of interesting characters and adventures. I can just picture the chubby twins doing their fantastic dance! This would be an excellent story for you to add on to with more adventures.
Keep up the good writing!
Hi Amelia
I like how you have taken the prompt and intertwined it with Alice in Wonderland. I thought it was a tricky prompt. What were you late for? Some vocabulary could have been improved, for example – “… doing a fantastic dance…” could be “…performing a fantastic dance…” But overall this is a well punctuated 100WC piece, keep up the great work! Ms T, New Zealand
Amelia, I love your imaginative story and connection to Alice in Wonderland! It sounds like her adventure down the rabbit hole could have a lot of interesting characters and adventures. I can just picture the chubby twins doing their fantastic dance! This would be an excellent story for you to add on to with more adventures.
Keep up the good writing!
Well done Amelia, this is a very good piece of writing xx
Amazing piece of work it was hilarious