Great story. I love the thought of a lion playing with a cornflake. What tune did he play? Can cornflakes dance? An interesting story, and one that shows you have a great imagination.
Even better if… you used an apostrophe in someone’s (because the cereal bowl belongs to someone).
And here’s an idea for you – do you know the word regurgitate? Look it up and find out where you could use it instead of the words you used (which were correct anyway, but sometimes it is nice to use a long word to test out your teacher!!).
Hi Turna,
Great story. I love the thought of a lion playing with a cornflake. What tune did he play? Can cornflakes dance? An interesting story, and one that shows you have a great imagination.
Even better if… you used an apostrophe in someone’s (because the cereal bowl belongs to someone).
And here’s an idea for you – do you know the word regurgitate? Look it up and find out where you could use it instead of the words you used (which were correct anyway, but sometimes it is nice to use a long word to test out your teacher!!).
Thanks
Mark
I enjoyed reading your writing Turna, I found it quite amusing. I really liked the description of the tent. Keep up the good work.
Great piece of writing Abz xx
Thank you for taking your time to comment. I will consider them.:D