Fantastic piece of writing, very descriptive and exciting. Well done Flynn Dad
I like the surprise ending with the drooling lion.
Do you need a plural for “cornflake” as it sounds like you ate more than one?
really nice
well done, Flynn
OOPS!!! I must have not noticed. I’ll try to change it.
very good
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Fantastic piece of writing, very descriptive and exciting. Well done Flynn
Dad
I like the surprise ending with the drooling lion.
Do you need a plural for “cornflake” as it sounds like you ate more than one?
really nice
well done, Flynn
OOPS!!! I must have not noticed. I’ll try to change it.
very good