Some very good advice Caitlin, I have only spotted a few mistakes! Despite that, you have produced a lovely piece of work. I’m sure that Liam would find your advice extremely useful! Well Done!!
Well done, your story is really good I like the adjectives like immature and dangerous you used I also like the part where you came up with ideas on why Liam shouldn’t go to space really interesting and maybe you could include semi colons to improve your grammer to a higher standard but overall it is amazing!!!
A better word in your sentence meteor might bump into you I’ve got a better world than bump the word is flails the new sentence would be ‘or meteor might flail into you’ that sounds a lot better.
Hi Caitlin.
I enjoyed reading this piece of writing because you warned Liam about the dangers that
might lurk within space. There is no informal language and it is just a good story in general. Well done.
Also, please check out mine and my classes blogs and please comment.
From, Sky M
think about grammar at the start of line 6. other than that if I received that letter it would defiantly help me make up my mind. I could see you in the future as a writer, Well done Caitlin!!!! Great work.
Some very good advice Caitlin, I have only spotted a few mistakes! Despite that, you have produced a lovely piece of work. I’m sure that Liam would find your advice extremely useful! Well Done!!
Great blog Caitlin but try not to use double negative!
Well done, your story is really good I like the adjectives like immature and dangerous you used I also like the part where you came up with ideas on why Liam shouldn’t go to space really interesting and maybe you could include semi colons to improve your grammer to a higher standard but overall it is amazing!!!
Hi Caitlin,
I really enjoyed reading this blog and I like how you backed up you points in your letter
Well Done!
A better word in your sentence meteor might bump into you I’ve got a better world than bump the word is flails the new sentence would be ‘or meteor might flail into you’ that sounds a lot better.
Hi Caitlin.
I enjoyed reading this piece of writing because you warned Liam about the dangers that
might lurk within space. There is no informal language and it is just a good story in general. Well done.
Also, please check out mine and my classes blogs and please comment.
From, Sky M
think about grammar at the start of line 6. other than that if I received that letter it would defiantly help me make up my mind. I could see you in the future as a writer, Well done Caitlin!!!! Great work.
Really good work but it should be ‘advise’ not advice.
I agree with that but other wise it was very perswasive.