Hi Amelie, your work is wonderful, your advice to Liam is very interesting and extremely persuading! The only thing you could improve on is maybe put some commas into your sentences to separate them (instead of a full stop.) You’ve used some very good words! If you want (which I am sure you do) to achieve a higher standard, then instead of using words such as: really and happy. You can use words like: extremely, ecstatically, joyfully or indeed a phase such as: over the moon (in place of happy) and things like that. Over all, your work is fabulous, I love your style of writing and that compared to a lot of people you’ve really made your own decision! Well Done Amelie!
Hi Amelie, your work is wonderful, your advice to Liam is very interesting and extremely persuading! The only thing you could improve on is maybe put some commas into your sentences to separate them (instead of a full stop.) You’ve used some very good words! If you want (which I am sure you do) to achieve a higher standard, then instead of using words such as: really and happy. You can use words like: extremely, ecstatically, joyfully or indeed a phase such as: over the moon (in place of happy) and things like that. Over all, your work is fabulous, I love your style of writing and that compared to a lot of people you’ve really made your own decision! Well Done Amelie!
Wow. Well done Amelie, I agree completely with Jacye Lee, fabulous work.
Miss Tytherleigh (I am using Mr Paine’s login)