Dear Abbie, I LOVE your story! I think it’s a bit unexpected that the ‘aliens’ took you away. I like that. Do you believe in aliens? I do. Also, I like your picture of the aliens in the space craft.
Next time, try and add a de:de sentence for example: I went outside: and out of nowhere came a giant circular blue space craft. It’s where you add a colon to separate the two clauses.
Well done! Good luck on the next 100 word challenge.
From Ray.
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I love the painting of the Alien.
Dear Abbie, I LOVE your story! I think it’s a bit unexpected that the ‘aliens’ took you away. I like that. Do you believe in aliens? I do. Also, I like your picture of the aliens in the space craft.
Next time, try and add a de:de sentence for example: I went outside: and out of nowhere came a giant circular blue space craft. It’s where you add a colon to separate the two clauses.
Well done! Good luck on the next 100 word challenge.
From Ray.
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thank you and yes I do believe in aliens. also thank you for the tip! 🙂 😀
I like your work Abbie 🙂
Hi Abbie, I love your story. Keep up all your amazing story writing. from Zoe
Well done Abbie I loved it! It really hooked me