Well done Emily, I really love the way you used descriptive detail to help me get a clear picture in my min; I really felt that I was there at the funfair with you and could almost smell the candyfloss being made. Next time try to use more of your senses to help evoke a more vivid image in your reader’s mind.
Keep up the great work, I enjoyed reading this.
Miss A
Team 100 WC London
great idea Emily, well done
Well done Emily, I really love the way you used descriptive detail to help me get a clear picture in my min; I really felt that I was there at the funfair with you and could almost smell the candyfloss being made. Next time try to use more of your senses to help evoke a more vivid image in your reader’s mind.
Keep up the great work, I enjoyed reading this.
Miss A
Team 100 WC London
this is great Emily it is very descriptive
The idea is great Emily and you have used good adjectives. well done