Some great short sentences Martha. I love the ending too – makes the reader think deeply. When should you not fear danger? Well done for a great piece.
Dear Martha
I really like the idea behind this story; you should be a psychologist. You have produced a good level of suspense with the use of short sentences. Have another look at the ellipses used in the middle of the writing, as I don’t believe it quite fits there. Keep up the good writing.
Regards
Mrs Johnson
Great idea Martha. you explained a lot in 100 words.
Some great short sentences Martha. I love the ending too – makes the reader think deeply. When should you not fear danger? Well done for a great piece.
Dear Martha
I really like the idea behind this story; you should be a psychologist. You have produced a good level of suspense with the use of short sentences. Have another look at the ellipses used in the middle of the writing, as I don’t believe it quite fits there. Keep up the good writing.
Regards
Mrs Johnson
Wow Martha this is a very thought provoking piece of writing! I really enjoyed reading it! Well done x
Martha, as always, really great. it was effective, descriptive and included a lot of deep thinking. Great work!!:D
amazing