Hi Sophia,
Thanks for sharing this. Brilliant idea to write about a cornflake – will you do a story about rice krispies soon as well?
I really want to know what it was that he saw, so I hope there is a next chapter. By the way, is Mrs Lion actually a lion?
You could maybe make it better by thinking about some commas, and I think “Oh” from Jeff needs quotation marks.
But great spelling, great ideas and great imagination.
Hi Sophia,
Thanks for sharing this. Brilliant idea to write about a cornflake – will you do a story about rice krispies soon as well?
I really want to know what it was that he saw, so I hope there is a next chapter. By the way, is Mrs Lion actually a lion?
You could maybe make it better by thinking about some commas, and I think “Oh” from Jeff needs quotation marks.
But great spelling, great ideas and great imagination.
Hey Mark, Thanks so much for taking the time to look at my work. I will definitely try and write about a rice crispie but im not sure it will fit in with the prompt. I will also think about using quotation marks!
Sophia x
Hey Mark, Thanks so much for taking the time to comment on my work. I will definitely try to write about a rice crispie but im not sure it will go with the prompt. I will also try and use quotation marks.
Sophia x
Hi Sophia,
Thanks for sharing this. Brilliant idea to write about a cornflake – will you do a story about rice krispies soon as well?
I really want to know what it was that he saw, so I hope there is a next chapter. By the way, is Mrs Lion actually a lion?
You could maybe make it better by thinking about some commas, and I think “Oh” from Jeff needs quotation marks.
But great spelling, great ideas and great imagination.
Mark
Hi Sophia,
Thanks for sharing this. Brilliant idea to write about a cornflake – will you do a story about rice krispies soon as well?
I really want to know what it was that he saw, so I hope there is a next chapter. By the way, is Mrs Lion actually a lion?
You could maybe make it better by thinking about some commas, and I think “Oh” from Jeff needs quotation marks.
But great spelling, great ideas and great imagination.
Mark
Hey Mark, Thanks so much for taking the time to look at my work. I will definitely try and write about a rice crispie but im not sure it will fit in with the prompt. I will also think about using quotation marks!
Sophia x
congratulations Sophia you got a comment from mark! well done on your work and the cliffhanger is so tense!
Emily xx
Awesome piece of writing!
well done, Sophia
Amazing writer, very good suspense
Hey Mark, Thanks so much for taking the time to comment on my work. I will definitely try to write about a rice crispie but im not sure it will go with the prompt. I will also try and use quotation marks.
Sophia x
Thanks Bryony! lyl xxxx
This is:
Fabulous, great, amazing , even more amazing.