Hello Serena,
What a wonderfully imaginative perspective you have brought to this week’s prompt! You have described the scene well, using some well placed punctuation and varying your sentence length. Your repetition of the adjective ‘gold’ adds to the impact of the effect. I just wonder why, if it is ‘in the future’, you have used past tense verbs…Perhaps it would lose its impact if it were written in the future tense, but worth bearing in mind.
Thank you for entering a carefully written, enjoyable read!
~ Mrs Speirs (100wc Team UK)
Hey Serena I didn’t see any unspelled words or misplaced capitals
Hello Serena,
What a wonderfully imaginative perspective you have brought to this week’s prompt! You have described the scene well, using some well placed punctuation and varying your sentence length. Your repetition of the adjective ‘gold’ adds to the impact of the effect. I just wonder why, if it is ‘in the future’, you have used past tense verbs…Perhaps it would lose its impact if it were written in the future tense, but worth bearing in mind.
Thank you for entering a carefully written, enjoyable read!
~ Mrs Speirs (100wc Team UK)
A lovely piece of writing. I bet you family would love to read it and leave a comment too!
I really enjoyed reading that well done
This was very interesting! I especially liked the part where you told us the names of the places.
such an amazing blog serena
Well done Serena excellent piece writing well done