What a great 100WC! I really love your original and quite scary idea about seeing something horrible happen on the Earth while looking down from a plane. You managed to fit a lot of action in to your 100Wc but you still used interesting and descriptive words. Next time, read your work through (out loud or with a partner) to check that you have all the full stops and new sentences that you need, and that you stick to one tense (past or present). Well done!
Hi Louie,
What a great 100WC! I really love your original and quite scary idea about seeing something horrible happen on the Earth while looking down from a plane. You managed to fit a lot of action in to your 100Wc but you still used interesting and descriptive words. Next time, read your work through (out loud or with a partner) to check that you have all the full stops and new sentences that you need, and that you stick to one tense (past or present). Well done!
Fiona